Post 7

Things to improve upon in my Draft:

1. Thesis statement:
1. Old: Standing on the line between Classic Noir and Neo-Noir challenges the film, testing its ability to stand on its own when not adhering exclusively to one subgenre or the other; fortunately for the viewers, Chinatown not only accepts the challenge, but passes its test cleverly and gracefully.
2. New: Occupying the line between classic noir and neo-noir challenges the film, testing its ability to stand on its own when not adhering exclusively to either subgenre; fortunately for the viewers, Chinatown not only accepts the challenge, but passes its test cleverly and gracefully while maintaining a complex plot that serves to make the movie an interesting and worthy watch.
2. I also need to transition between the brief plot summary and the introductory paragraph that includes the thesis statement.  I also need to make these flow into one paragraph seamlessly.
3. I need to connect my topic sentences to the thesis.
1. Old:  Chinatown, as the title would suggest, is an important element to the film.
2. New: The return to Chinatown serves to ensure the theme of nostalgia in the film, touching base with characteristics promised by neo-noir.
3. Old: The film does, however, utilize elements often found in Classic Noir as well.
4. New: While Chinatown certainly displays thematic elements found in neo-noir, it displays classic signs showing that it also belongs in the classic noir genre, which helps to enrich the complexity of the film.
5. Old: Another attribute that makes this film so wonderful is its complexity.
6. New: The complex plot enhanced by layers of mystery and clever narration excites the audience and serves to make the film a more enjoyable viewing experience.